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Organization Idea Pitch: Thom

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  • Voice/Body Language
  • Ethos/Professionalism
  • The “Hook”
  • Information/Level of Detail
  • “Reality” of Project
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  1. September 19, 2011 at 7:14 PM

    I was quite nervous, and I believe it shows. Also, I totally over-shot the right level of professionalism.

  2. September 20, 2011 at 4:31 AM

    Tom has a great idea and it shows that he has done a lot of work for it. He was very professional and had a great deal of knowledge about what he wants to do. Good job!

  3. September 20, 2011 at 7:51 PM

    since i was in SGA, ISF, CSSA and found the SLU badminton club , i have to say to found a OG in SLU is really easy, however how to maintenance it, to make the OG “keep running” is the real challenge, most SLU OG want to do a lot, however almost none of them succeed people meet a couple time in a month and spend a couple hour is easy, but almost did not do anything, and we have mid term and lot breaks. so for my considering it is better to make your Club be perffessional instand of open to public, since when have limited resources, and we can not feed all people. by the way you did a really professional job, dress well, use visual ads, however you was really nervous and i feel you was shaking when you was talking.

  4. September 21, 2011 at 8:59 PM

    I think Thom’s pitch showed the most professionalism of all the pitches, well done! Being comfortable in front of your audience is the only area that needs improvement. The project sounds very realistic, but I don’t know if I could’ve been of any use to the group since I’m a computer idiot…

  5. September 21, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    I liked the way that Thom demonstrated the need for his club as part of his “Hook”. It’s was clear to me that he has a passion for this idea and was very knowledgable in the finer details. One area for improvement that i saw was that he seemed very nervous. Other then that I thought it was good presentation.

  6. September 21, 2011 at 11:26 PM

    I liked the way that Thom demonstrated the need for his club as part of his “Hook”. It was clear to me that he has a passion for this idea and was very knowledgeable in the finer details. Thom’s dress and presentation style were very professional. The project idea was realistic for the given length of time. Thom had done a lot of the ground work which would make his project fit into the amount of time available for the project. Thom was able to answer the questions with the same amount of detail and professionalism that he gave the presentation with. One area for improvement that I saw was that his voice and body language gave an impression that he was nervous and uncomfortable.

  7. September 23, 2011 at 1:47 AM

    Thom has a great idea and he seemed extremely passionate about his organization. It is prominent that he has done a lot of work for his objectives. He was very professional and had a great deal of knowledge about what he wants to do. He managed to get his idea across in a very professional manner. He spoke clearly throughout the presentation. He was dressed in a very professionally manner and used his hacking exercise to his advantage. A few draw backs in my opinion were that I felt Thom gave us too much information considering it was a two minute pitch. If he had tailored his pitch and made it shorter thus more precise, I feel he would have done an even better job. He seemed a little nervous towards the beginning but gained momentum towards the end. The project seemed very realistic and internet security should be given a great deal of importance. Over all it was a very professional pitch.

  8. September 28, 2011 at 10:02 PM

    Voice/Body Language: Somewhat shaky. Sitting down and narrating compter work looked like terrible body language. Starting with “Um” was bad. Also, every subsequent “um” was bad.
    Ethos/Professionalism: Established partially by dress and introduction.
    The “Hook”: Very cool, but barely caught on film.
    Information/Level of Detail: Probably too much detail was used.
    “Reality” of Project: The project is already happening.
    Response to Questions: Wanting to educate, I taught a class of middle schoolers how to make a web page when I worked in East Los Angeles– true story. I should have talked about that.

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